Name of Reviewed Individual: katie Allison

1. What are the strengths of your partner’s essay? Why?

-a lot ot details

2. What areas could use improvements? In other words, what suggestions can you give

your partner that will help his/her paper improve?

-sentences are way too long. Break it up a little

3. What is your favorite literary device used in your partner’s essay?
-sensory details and describing her feelings.
4. What is the part of the paper that stands out as the most "catchy" or important?
-it ended with a hook. she ended talking about her mom taking her to the doctor but didn't talk about what happend.

helen keller story questions

1. What did you think of this narrative? I think the narrative was well written because it was really descriptive. I can almost see myself in the stroy, watching all of this happening.

2. What was most interesting or engaging about it? It was something different, and that's what appealed to  me the most. I can almost feel what the characters in the story was feeling.

3. What surprised you? I was not really surprised by anything

4. Did this change your outlook on Helen Keller at all? Why or why not? No because I heard of Helen Keller before so none of this was necessarily new to me.

5. Copy and paste three examples of vivid detail and imagery that helped enhance the storyWe walked down the path to the well-house, attracted by the fragrance of the honeysuckle with which it was covered. Some one was drawing water and my teacher placed my hand under the spout. As the cool stream gushed over one hand she spelled into the other the word water, first slowly, then rapidly. I stood still, my whole attention fixed upon the motions of her fingers. Suddenly I felt a misty consciousness as of something forgotten--a thrill of returning thought; and somehow the mystery of language was revealed to me. I knew then that "w-a-t-e-r" meant the wonderful cool something that was flowing over my hand. That living word awakened my soul, gave it light, hope, joy, set it free! There were barriers still, it is true, but barriers that could in time be swept away.
6. How can a narrative be more engaging than something like a biography? Why is it important to get someone's personal perspective? so you can understand their point of view when that particular event took place. biograpgy are kind of boring because it's just stating facts instead of appealing to your senses.

7. Make a bulltted lists of some things you could write a narrative about
-vacations
-New York Trip
-special memories
- first football game
-first volunteet experience

I am from

I am from the other side of the earth
from big family in china.
I am from a 4-story home,
watching shinning stars with my grandpa at night
I am from missing those moments, and looking forward to this summer.
A summer in china, a summer with my family i rarely get to see.
I am from a city in Southeast of china.
I am from Guangzhou, China.

I am from the great wall of china,
a wall that's well-known to the world.
the only structure that can be observed from space.
I am walking on the border of my country .
I am from the bright red flag containing 5 golden stars.

I am from leading my class in Student council,
from follower to leader.
I am from dream to action.
I am from Mock Trial,
from performing in courtroom
and playing witness and attorney roles.

I am from a passionate family that shares everything.
From a family that values time together,
from having dinner together every night to desserts.
I am from a family that accept my flaws
I am from a family that is supportive and understanding.

I am from two completely different cultures.
I am from a culture that celebrates New Year on a different calender system.
I am from a cultures that believes dragon is the supreme animal.
i am from a cultures that fought for equality.
i am from a that has many opportunities.
I am from combining the two cultures.
I am from a culture that encourages education and success.
I am from a culture that encourages independent.
i am from two different cultures that shaped me who i am today. 

survey

1. Yes and No. I wanted to improve my writing skills but i dont like it because it's not one of my strengths.
2. short stories, letters, notes to friends, and autobiography
3. short stories, song, notes from friends, magazines
4.no
5.d
6.yes, because you get to hear other people's views
7. depending on the topic we are discussing. I usually lead the discussion if it's something i am passionate about. Most of the time i would contribute a thought here and ther.
8. I work at Hollister. I am in the Mock Trial team. I have two younger silbings but i dont usually babysit them.
9. I had Mock Trial all last weekend. I had practice everyday over the weekend as well as a scrimmage at Marysville Courtroom. We went against Marysville High School's best team. I think we did pretty well considering that it was our first scrimmage of the season. When I didn't have practice I hungout with my friends and we went out to dinner for one of my friend's birthday.
10. No
11. No questions